Rylee Kramer

http://www.kmbc.com/article/mother-of-two-20-dies-one-day-after-flu-diagnosis/14200779 the good things about this article is that they got interviews and used quotes in it, but it kind of just shows what is in the video. I think from reading the article and not watching the video someone would be able to understand what happened.  Something I would suggest is maybe to elaborate on the children because they're in the title of the article to grab the readers attention, but it doesn't say a lot about them. A question I was left with was how the flu killed her and they said one thing about pneumonia, but I would like to understand more about how it got to the severity or how she may have contracted a deadly case of a curable virus.  I will implement the idea of using the the scientific facts and the health alerts like the stats they used in the end of the article. They said that only 10% of this years Australian vaccine was affective so it meant that they couldn't t

http://www.kmbc.com/article/chiefs-announce-suspension-of-marcus-peters-ahead-of-sundays-game-versus-the-raiders/14295553 This article is good because it is to the point. I think that it gave all the necessary information and was pretty specific saying what happened during the game. The article was really brief so it was kind of hard to get more information, but despite that the readers can still get the story from it which is a plus.  The story needed to have more information or at least elaborate on more of he situation and why it happened the way it did. They could've put a video in to show what Marcus Peters did, or a link or something to show what happened so people can better understand. I also think that they needed to specify more that the chiefs are suspending him, and the NFL hasn't. This is knowledge I already have so when clicking into the article it already reiterated things I knew and that was not beneficial for me.  One thing I will take from this is

http://fox4kc.com/2017/12/08/independence-officer-shot-in-the-line-of-duty-will-return-home-after-months-at-nebraska-rehabilitation-center/ In this article, the writer does a good job at breaking up the different things that  contribute to the story. This is helpful when looking at specific details, but not always. I think it is a short story with not as much information as they could've had, but they mentioned every detail which was good. One thing that I would change is the format, while its good that there breaking it up, it looks bad because there isn't enough content to make a paragraph and it just looks like 10 broken up sentences instead of connecting the information.  They kept it short and sweet by the information they gave and the wording of things. I will take away the wording from this and try to use words that would get to the point quicker and still tell a story. This one was a little difficult to read because of the constant break in information so it would

http://www.cnn.com/2017/11/30/europe/donald-trump-theresa-may-twitter-spat/index.html In this story, the writer did a good job of explaining what happened and the people related to what is going on. They wrote what the issue was and described what happened in the first paragraph which was very helpful for someone who would like together the quick information from clicking on the article. one thing I would change about the is the organization piece If I'm looking for a specific detail on one part of the story, I have to red the whole thing rather than scrolling to a place where it might be shown. I think it would be helpful to split it up into sections where finding out more would be easier. I do like the way they wrote the story in the beginning they hooked the reader and I will try to implement that into my work. They started the story with the main points and that was helpful, but if I wanted to know more it wouldn't have been as easy to find quickly.

http://www.kmbc.com/article/mother-faces-felony-charge-after-using-recorder-to-thwart-school-bullies/13946697 In this story, the reporter did a good job with getting a very in depth interview with the mother and it really showed a lot of emotion and helped tie the story together. I think this is good because instead of the reporter saying everything, the mom was able to share her thoughts and feelings with the reporter as the main person involved, rather than hearing it from another person.  I think the audio for this story was a little messed up because during the interview the moms audio is on the right while the reporters audio is on the left and it is not balanced.  I think this is a good example of asking the harder questions and getting the better answers because the reporter didn't have to say as much. I will definitely keep that in mind when interviewing people over something they're passionate about.

http://www.kmbc.com/article/one-person-killed-in-workplace-incident-possible-explosion-reported-at-olathe-garmin-headquarters/13943666 In this story the reporter did a good job of getting the main points across and laying downtime basics of what occurred. She was also good with the standup location being able to show the people they were talking abut and what the scene looked like with her there too. They also got a good shot of Garmin from above that added a lot to the story. I think the reporter could've done a better job at interviewing the guy because she says it is not hazardous and then he says the exact same thing. Also, I think she could've elaborated more on what happened rather than just saying a pipe ruptured. I think she did a good job of breaking up her words and sentences to be able to tell the difference in what she was saying all by the tone of her voice and I will try to implement that into things like the raven minute when its basically just and